教你如何三步成为雅思小作文达人

2017-01-04 10:41 作者:admin
摘要:虽然雅思小作文分数比重小于大作文,但是小作文的写作相对比较容易操作。在此建议备考时间充足的烤鸭们注重提升写作实力和写作速度。那么完成一篇小作文应该从何做起呢?

  以下就是100留学为大家整理的教你如何三步成为雅思小作文达人。希望对各位考生的备考有所帮助:

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  虽然雅思小作文分数比重小于大作文,但是小作文的写作相对比较容易操作。在此建议备考时间充足的烤鸭们注重提升写作实力和写作速度。

  那么完成一篇小作文应该从何做起呢?

  我们首先分析一下6分饼图范文,总结一些得分和十分的原因,做到心中有数。

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  C9T3——Band 6范文

  The diagrams show statistic information regarding the ages of the habitants of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and also a estimative for 2050.

  We can see that in 2000 the majority of people in Yemen was between 0 and 14 years old, whith 50.1%, whereas in Italy most of the population was between 15-59 years old (61.6%), in the same year. On the other hand, just 3.6% of people in the former country was 60 years old or more in 2000, while in the latter country this figure is represented with 24.1%.

  The projections for 2050 show that the number of people with 15-59 years and 60 years or more will increase in Yemen, reaching 57.3% and 5.7% respectively. In contrast, in Italy, the population with 15-59 years will decrease to 46.2%, while people with 60 years or more will grow to 42.3%.

  Overall, it is possible to see that there is an upward trend on the rates of people with 60 years or more in both countries.

  下面我们结合考官评语,认真研读这篇范文,明确得分点和扣分点,让我们对自己的写作水平有更明确的衡量标准。

  (1) 任务完成情况:

  (得分原因)The answer addresses the task, “reporting sufficient details”(信息比较全面) for the reader to be “accurately informed”(信息准确)

  (失分原因)even though in each chart one element is “implied”(暗示) “rather than overtly stated”(没有明确描述). (如范文第2段中没有明确说明2000年也门15-59岁人口的比重以及意大利0到14岁的人口比重;再比如范文第3段中没有明确说明两个国家2050年0到14岁的人口比重)。

  (得分原因) “Clear comparisons”(清晰的信息比较) are drawn between the two countries. An overview is given(总趋势描述),

  (失分原因) although focusing on only one age group reduces its clarity. (最后一段只总结了两个国家60岁以上的人口的变化而忽视了另外两个年龄段的总趋势描述)。

  (2) 连接性与连贯性:

  (得分原因)The information is well organised and a range of linking devices used, e.g. whereas; the latter country.

  以第二段为例让我们一起体会连接词的使用:

  We can see that in 2000 the majority of people in Yemen was between 0 and 14 years old, with 50.1%, whereas in Italy most of the population was between 15-59 years old (61.6%), in the same year. On the other hand, just 3.6% of people in the former country was 60 years old or more in 2000, while in the latter country, this figure is represented with 24.1%.

  (3) 词汇:

  (得分原因)”Vocabulary is adequate”(词汇量和词汇应用准确度足够) for the task and “generally accurate”(基本准确),

  (失分原因)though attempt to use less common words are less successful. A few errors occur in word formation e.g. statistic (statistical); estimative(estimate), but they “do not affect understanding”(有错误但是不影响理解).

  (4) 语法:

  (得分原因)Simple and complex sentence forms are produced with few grammatical errors,

  (失分原因)but the range of structures is rather restricted(句式缺乏多样性)

  综上我们根据“得分要素”总结答题步骤如下:

  step1,找出要描述的信息的特征,比如占最多,增长快,保持不变等等。找出可以用来比较的信息,比如共同点,相反趋势等等。

  step2,组织段落,可以按趋势分段,按比重分段,也可按时间分段。组织语言,尽可能把相关联的内容写到一起,用连接词衔接。

  step3,归纳总趋势,找出最明显的特征,最大变化,最有共性的信息等。

  以下图为例,烤鸭们自己来小试牛刀:

  step1:首先信息选取:

  (1) working 和sleeping最多,但是一个增多,一个减少

  (2) 同样减少的是going out with friends or families

  (3) 相反花在relaxing at home和traveling to work的时间都有不同程度的增加。

  (4) 只有other interest and sport playing的时间没有发生变化

  step2:

  开头:改写

  第一段(1)(2)

  第二段But on the other hand(3)

  第三段In contrast,(4)

  step3: overview(结尾)

  The chart shows the percentage of time working adults spent the day on different activities in a particular country in 1985 and 2008.

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